Friday, May 30, 2008

I want to be in that musical too.

This entire assignment has given me the greatest urge to sing (by myself), and write a song. I have decided to write this song based upon an accumulation of views and the crafting of outlooks that many people have given the impression of attaining around me. It is very interesting to notice how revolutionary our own beliefs may be when grasped by the hands of tone.
There is a backyard there was a movie that meant more than writing
An impulsive taste that allowed us to be children
The wounding of vanity, we never can be too being
(it is never collective, it is never collective)
But who feels more embarrassed than when they are unaware?
It is fine to watch polished individuals be tainted.
Where are the authentic games we once labeled ours.
(rightfully his, rightfully theirs)
And we will gladly regress with a shattered mind.
Nothing walks and stillness is a seesaw,
For the height depends on those men.
(apologetic in thought, apologetic in time)
The eyes are sometimes flawed with aim
There is numbness in their approval.
It is always better to stare at the leg of a table.
(soothing with mercy.)

I suppose this could be seen as a poem too, as justification.

1 comment:

Mr. J. Cook said...

Thanks for this.
Great opening line. Now this is the sort of nostalgia that I go for. Fully experienced. Private. And not built around some kind of external superidentity, as in "the CLASS OF '08" or "Gloucester High School Fisherman," etc.

In fact with lines like "watch polished individuals be tainted" and "authentic games we once labeled ours" I think *this* should be the class song.

Finally the compression of tumultuous experience that you achieve in four words--"stillness is a seesaw"--is impressive.

Okay, so that last sentence wasn't really final: your image intelligence is keen. (What does *that* mean?) O.K. so..."numbness in their approval" is then fleshed out (given corporeal body, an image in the world) by "it is always better to stare at the leg of a table"--an image of numbness, even paralysis if you will.

But then (& this *is* really the final comment) the song ends with hope with soothing and mercy and this hope is hard one not cheap or cliched. This is very hard to do & many poets/songwriters are not even willing to attempt it.

Thank you.